Here’s an early draft of Siegfried Sassoon’s ‘The General’, which we looked at in class today, together with his cartoon sketch of the scene. It’s interesting to note that the final line originally read ‘He murdered them both’, rather than the more slangy, colloquial ‘He did for them both’. Sassoon also underlined ‘Now’ in line three, which gives it a stress that disrupts the anapestic rhythm a little.
Welding the vertebraeMy beast, my age, who will try to look you in the eye, and weld the vertebrae of century to century? (Osip Mendelstam, 'The Age', ll. 1-4)